Re-write Feed Back and Information Thread

[La Patience]

Well here is the thread were I will be giving out information on my Sci-Fi re-write hee. this is were yall can leave feed back or ask questions hee. well feel free to give recommendations for improvements or changes all that stuff hee.

Im gonna post some concept are as wel so look out for that hee.
thanks in advance for any comments :thumbsup:

[La Patience]

Well for all those who have read the re-write I'm happy to say the next part will be coming up soon. as you can hopefully see the re-write is alot longer and the charicters have been twaeked a little. with this next part I will be introducing the charicters to where they have ended up and the difference in technology. I want Elmina to have a big part instead of just being Patiences little creation.

well for a little hint as to the basis of the new places technology here is what it is based on: air ships.

Ok it has been done before but i'm hoping to go new places with it. well until the next update.

bye bye

[La Patience]

Ok Chapter 2 is up for anyone interested heh.

It's not as big as the first part but the next will be hopefully be bigger as it will be the first contact between the survivers of the crash and those native to the planet.

[Jasoneagle]

Nice story, Where's the rest?


Thought I do like the rewrite, I liked the Beginning of the First, Perhaps a few changes to the Names and a few other things and it could even make a different story all together.

[La Patience]

Ya I suppose your right about it being basically a different story. I originaly tried a rewrite because the first one was like a skeliton, there was nothing there but the frame of the story and i wanted to fleshen it out a bit. obviously i kind of changed things here and there and well here it is lol. I tried to re create the beggining but just using the first version wasn't to helpfull.

anywho I'm glad you like it and the next part is coming up soon. I'm kind of starting it from one of the fighting ships captains perspective. I'm trying to get a military view of what this crashed ship could mean to either of the two forces.

I only have a little to do on it and then i'll post it up okdokie thanks for the comment as well.

[Jasoneagle]

Remember you can bounce Ideas off people to get a feel of the way you want it to go but in the End it is your story and it will go as you say, but if you want any help I think I speak for the whole site here when say I will be glad to be your Guinna Pie and read it and tell you what I think.

[La Patience]

Well thanks Jason, I think I'll take you up on that offer as the next bit which i'm due to put up has a few things I think could be changed so I'll PM you it first lol. My time on the net has been kinda sketchy lol as alots been keeping me away from computer. Il give you the copy during this week ok dokie.

thanks fo the comment and the helpful offer