La Patience
27-06-2008, 01:14
Well here is the first 1,900-2000 words of the re-write I was doing (heh about time eh) well I'd love to here some feed back but I'll open a seperate thread for that okdoike (its just so there is no gaps thanks and if thats a problem let me know okdokie)
Well here it is I hope you enjoy:
Patience Alvair walked along the central corridor of the sleek space liner she was on. She had just had her evening meal in the ships restaurant, a rather over expensive meal. The ship she was on was named the Holly Bird, it was a small luxury liner intended for fast travel between planets within the Terran alliances territory. Patience had learned from her short time on it that it had around 100 crew and could carry 50 passengers. It cost Patience a small fortune to get on but the ship was fast and she wanted to get to her destination fast, very fast. Besides once she got to her destination money wouldn’t be a worry any more.
All the money, all the fame. It will all be mine; no one will laugh at my research any longer nor my inventions. Not when I show them Elmina Patience thought to herself laughing under her breath.
“It’s about time someone actually paid me the respect I deserve” This she said out loud and this raised the heads of some of the passing crew and passengers.
“Stupid woman” she whispered to herself “don’t bloat until after you’ve shown them”.
Patience had reached the passengers quarters and found her room. She unlocked it and went in to an overly lavish looking room that while very expensive looking (which it was) it didn’t appeal to Patience and it wasn’t practical. She let that thought leave her head and went on to lock the door. Once that was out of the way she turned and hurried to the bed. Beside it was a pile of clothes and spare sheets and a few pillows here and there. At first glance it just looked like Patience had been a bit messy, but as patience started pulling all the clothes and sheets off a form appeared underneath it. The form of a woman. At last the last sheet was pulled of and there sat the lifeless shape of Elmina, Patience’s pride and joy and her ticket to unlimited funding on any of her projects. In front of her was the first working, self aware android. It had taken Patience 15 years to make and well over £3million credits of money (that hadn’t been paid off) to make. It had also cost her her home, her family and almost her own life from people wanting there money back. Patience however tended to block that from her mind.
Patience looked down upon her creation and admired it, then crouching beside the lifeless body she pressed a button that was hidden behind her left ear. Suddenly the Elmina’s eyes lids open to reveal two swirling blue voids that were Elmina’s eyes.
“Elmina ready and fully operational, please state my assignment… Patience” were the first words to leave Elmina’s fully working mouth.
“Elmina use your sensors to tell me about where we are” patience asked
“We are onboard the civilian luxury liner the Holly Bird. The ship has 98 crew members and is currently carrying 28 passengers to several destinations. These destinations in the order of where we will arrive first are: Terra IV, Sygnus III, Mandara I and Simara I. The Holly Bird is a small vessel exactly 204 meters in length. Its Captain is a man called Roger Lacknor. He has run this ship since it was built and has made a successful business in doing so. There are several other things of interest about where we are shall I continue.” Elmina said in a monotonous voice.
“No, Tell me about Sygnus III” Patience asked.
“Sygnus III is a small planet located deep within Terran territory. It is the home of the research institute of machinery and bio technology. They have been trying for many years to create a Android that can learn and act independently. They develop weapons for the Terran alliances armada’s and have been given several contracts from civilian businesses to make technology for them.” She responded
“Elmina state what you are” Patience said with a growing smirk
“I am Elmina creation of Patience Alvair, I am an independent entity that can learn from a plethora of sources including observation, data ****ysis and communication with other beings. I have learned several different languages by accessing databases from several different planets. I have several features including internal/external sensors. Several ports that can be connected to a variety of computers within the Terran alliance and can interpret many different data types” she said in the same voice.
“Good Elmina, You will make me the most appreciated inventor and researcher in the Terran alliance. Now go and use that computer over there and continue your studies” Patience said thinking to herself of the fame she was in for.
“As you Request” was the reply.
* * *
Patience had gone to bed after looking at her notes and the only noise in the room other than Patience’s snoring was the low hum coming from the computer Elmina was plugged into. She was processing all the data she could on anything she could find. However she wasn’t focusing all her attention on the computer. She was actually monitoring the entire ship and the space around it by accessing the ships computers. It wasn’t hard for her to get past the security and she didn’t really give any thought to whether or not anyone was aware what she was doing, not even patience.
She enjoyed seeing how humans lived. They slept, they ate, they did many things that while may be regarded as useless or time consuming, were things that defined them as sentient human beings.
Being human, what would it be like? All that useless stuff they do. Would I be able to do that Came a small voice from somewhere inside.
This voice was a constant companion to Elmina, she didn’t know what it was, maybe it was a program that Patience had created. Elmina never asked questions so she never got answers. She had once attempted to search a computers database for ’Inner voices’ but just got crime records of people who murdered people because a voice told them to. This thoroughly put Elmina off, she didn’t want to be such a person. She hadn’t tried to find anything out about inner voices since.
While Elmina observed other people doing different things she was also aware of the space outside the ship. She could detect the little particles of dust littered about and of nebulae that the ship was passing by. She also became aware of another anomaly outside the ship. One that was growing, fast. She searched her data banks along with the computers for information on it and found nothing. This was something that had either never been encountered or that had never been reported. Elmina then searched for similar anomaly’s but it didn’t help. The thing whatever it was growing and she could see via the surveillance equipment she was hacked into that up on the bridge they had detected it to and they looked just as puzzled. This puzzlement soon changed to fear when the thing caused the ship to stagger and it began to get pulled into it. Elmina watched as the captain issued commands to get the engines up to full power and all emergency boosters be activated.
Outside in space the ships engines lit up as more power rushed into them and from openings littered around the back end of the ship more thrusters appeared and began to power up as well. It wasn’t enough the ship was starting to break apart as the two apposing forces strained on the Holly Bird. Elmina was aware of this but if the crew up on the bridge were they weren’t showing it. They all seemed to be running around the bridge and a few of them were running through the ship to what she discovered was the escape pods. Useless was all that Elmina could think to that.
Elmina became aware that Patience had gotten up and was only beginning to realise something was wrong. Staying connected to the computer she turned around to speak inform her of what was transpiring.
“We are currently being drawn into an unknown anomaly Patience, the bridge crew are unable to do anything and have begun acting erratically. The ship has engaged all engines and emergency thrusters but this had in fact worsened the situation, the ship is now ripping itself in two. We will have a hull breach in about 30 seconds and the ship will enter the centre of the anomaly in approximately 2 minutes. What shall we do?”
Elmina said in that now disturbing monotonous voice.
Patience just stared as she sore her dreams breaking, breaking right in front of her and now her pride and joy had so calmly informed her of her impending death. She wanted to scream.
“what can we do, can you do anything, CAN YOU!!” patience all but creamed out.
“Yes I can at least prevent from breaking up, so much” was the reply.
“DO IT, DO IT NOW” patience was beginning to cry all her dreams were over, she was becoming as erratic as the men on the bridge or that were on the bridge a minute ago were.
She turned and began to work on saving the ship, it was however to late a huge metal scream arose as the hull broke apart and from the survallance equipment she sore several crew and a couple of passangers get sucked out into space, these were on there way to the escape pods. I knew it was hopeless came the cold inner voice of Elmina, she ignored it. The ship had activated its force fields and the ship continued into the anomaly. Elmina had accessed the helm controls and was now powering down the engines and re routing all the power from non essential systems into structural integrity and force fields. It was having some effect. She turned to see how Patience was doing but all she sore was Patience sprayed out on the floor. Obviously she had fallen and knocked herself out when the ships hull had breached.
The Holly Bird was now entering the anomaly and a great jolt shook the ship, Elmina flew from her chair to the ground and the cable connecting her the computer was ripped from her. Without the sensors from the ship she had only a limited range to see with her own sensors. She had no idea what was happening around her or the ship. Every time she tried to move she was shoved back down again by a force.
* * *
The Holly Bird entered the centre of the anomaly and began to fluctuate. The ship kept rocking back and forth as something happened, something that no one could see or begin to comprehend; And then nothing. Just void around the ship. Not even the lights from the Holly Bird made any difference. It was pure nothingness. It stayed this way for what could have been years or just a second, there was no way to tell but suddenly the ship materialised somewhere, somewhere different and it was falling….fast.
Well here it is I hope you enjoy:
Patience Alvair walked along the central corridor of the sleek space liner she was on. She had just had her evening meal in the ships restaurant, a rather over expensive meal. The ship she was on was named the Holly Bird, it was a small luxury liner intended for fast travel between planets within the Terran alliances territory. Patience had learned from her short time on it that it had around 100 crew and could carry 50 passengers. It cost Patience a small fortune to get on but the ship was fast and she wanted to get to her destination fast, very fast. Besides once she got to her destination money wouldn’t be a worry any more.
All the money, all the fame. It will all be mine; no one will laugh at my research any longer nor my inventions. Not when I show them Elmina Patience thought to herself laughing under her breath.
“It’s about time someone actually paid me the respect I deserve” This she said out loud and this raised the heads of some of the passing crew and passengers.
“Stupid woman” she whispered to herself “don’t bloat until after you’ve shown them”.
Patience had reached the passengers quarters and found her room. She unlocked it and went in to an overly lavish looking room that while very expensive looking (which it was) it didn’t appeal to Patience and it wasn’t practical. She let that thought leave her head and went on to lock the door. Once that was out of the way she turned and hurried to the bed. Beside it was a pile of clothes and spare sheets and a few pillows here and there. At first glance it just looked like Patience had been a bit messy, but as patience started pulling all the clothes and sheets off a form appeared underneath it. The form of a woman. At last the last sheet was pulled of and there sat the lifeless shape of Elmina, Patience’s pride and joy and her ticket to unlimited funding on any of her projects. In front of her was the first working, self aware android. It had taken Patience 15 years to make and well over £3million credits of money (that hadn’t been paid off) to make. It had also cost her her home, her family and almost her own life from people wanting there money back. Patience however tended to block that from her mind.
Patience looked down upon her creation and admired it, then crouching beside the lifeless body she pressed a button that was hidden behind her left ear. Suddenly the Elmina’s eyes lids open to reveal two swirling blue voids that were Elmina’s eyes.
“Elmina ready and fully operational, please state my assignment… Patience” were the first words to leave Elmina’s fully working mouth.
“Elmina use your sensors to tell me about where we are” patience asked
“We are onboard the civilian luxury liner the Holly Bird. The ship has 98 crew members and is currently carrying 28 passengers to several destinations. These destinations in the order of where we will arrive first are: Terra IV, Sygnus III, Mandara I and Simara I. The Holly Bird is a small vessel exactly 204 meters in length. Its Captain is a man called Roger Lacknor. He has run this ship since it was built and has made a successful business in doing so. There are several other things of interest about where we are shall I continue.” Elmina said in a monotonous voice.
“No, Tell me about Sygnus III” Patience asked.
“Sygnus III is a small planet located deep within Terran territory. It is the home of the research institute of machinery and bio technology. They have been trying for many years to create a Android that can learn and act independently. They develop weapons for the Terran alliances armada’s and have been given several contracts from civilian businesses to make technology for them.” She responded
“Elmina state what you are” Patience said with a growing smirk
“I am Elmina creation of Patience Alvair, I am an independent entity that can learn from a plethora of sources including observation, data ****ysis and communication with other beings. I have learned several different languages by accessing databases from several different planets. I have several features including internal/external sensors. Several ports that can be connected to a variety of computers within the Terran alliance and can interpret many different data types” she said in the same voice.
“Good Elmina, You will make me the most appreciated inventor and researcher in the Terran alliance. Now go and use that computer over there and continue your studies” Patience said thinking to herself of the fame she was in for.
“As you Request” was the reply.
* * *
Patience had gone to bed after looking at her notes and the only noise in the room other than Patience’s snoring was the low hum coming from the computer Elmina was plugged into. She was processing all the data she could on anything she could find. However she wasn’t focusing all her attention on the computer. She was actually monitoring the entire ship and the space around it by accessing the ships computers. It wasn’t hard for her to get past the security and she didn’t really give any thought to whether or not anyone was aware what she was doing, not even patience.
She enjoyed seeing how humans lived. They slept, they ate, they did many things that while may be regarded as useless or time consuming, were things that defined them as sentient human beings.
Being human, what would it be like? All that useless stuff they do. Would I be able to do that Came a small voice from somewhere inside.
This voice was a constant companion to Elmina, she didn’t know what it was, maybe it was a program that Patience had created. Elmina never asked questions so she never got answers. She had once attempted to search a computers database for ’Inner voices’ but just got crime records of people who murdered people because a voice told them to. This thoroughly put Elmina off, she didn’t want to be such a person. She hadn’t tried to find anything out about inner voices since.
While Elmina observed other people doing different things she was also aware of the space outside the ship. She could detect the little particles of dust littered about and of nebulae that the ship was passing by. She also became aware of another anomaly outside the ship. One that was growing, fast. She searched her data banks along with the computers for information on it and found nothing. This was something that had either never been encountered or that had never been reported. Elmina then searched for similar anomaly’s but it didn’t help. The thing whatever it was growing and she could see via the surveillance equipment she was hacked into that up on the bridge they had detected it to and they looked just as puzzled. This puzzlement soon changed to fear when the thing caused the ship to stagger and it began to get pulled into it. Elmina watched as the captain issued commands to get the engines up to full power and all emergency boosters be activated.
Outside in space the ships engines lit up as more power rushed into them and from openings littered around the back end of the ship more thrusters appeared and began to power up as well. It wasn’t enough the ship was starting to break apart as the two apposing forces strained on the Holly Bird. Elmina was aware of this but if the crew up on the bridge were they weren’t showing it. They all seemed to be running around the bridge and a few of them were running through the ship to what she discovered was the escape pods. Useless was all that Elmina could think to that.
Elmina became aware that Patience had gotten up and was only beginning to realise something was wrong. Staying connected to the computer she turned around to speak inform her of what was transpiring.
“We are currently being drawn into an unknown anomaly Patience, the bridge crew are unable to do anything and have begun acting erratically. The ship has engaged all engines and emergency thrusters but this had in fact worsened the situation, the ship is now ripping itself in two. We will have a hull breach in about 30 seconds and the ship will enter the centre of the anomaly in approximately 2 minutes. What shall we do?”
Elmina said in that now disturbing monotonous voice.
Patience just stared as she sore her dreams breaking, breaking right in front of her and now her pride and joy had so calmly informed her of her impending death. She wanted to scream.
“what can we do, can you do anything, CAN YOU!!” patience all but creamed out.
“Yes I can at least prevent from breaking up, so much” was the reply.
“DO IT, DO IT NOW” patience was beginning to cry all her dreams were over, she was becoming as erratic as the men on the bridge or that were on the bridge a minute ago were.
She turned and began to work on saving the ship, it was however to late a huge metal scream arose as the hull broke apart and from the survallance equipment she sore several crew and a couple of passangers get sucked out into space, these were on there way to the escape pods. I knew it was hopeless came the cold inner voice of Elmina, she ignored it. The ship had activated its force fields and the ship continued into the anomaly. Elmina had accessed the helm controls and was now powering down the engines and re routing all the power from non essential systems into structural integrity and force fields. It was having some effect. She turned to see how Patience was doing but all she sore was Patience sprayed out on the floor. Obviously she had fallen and knocked herself out when the ships hull had breached.
The Holly Bird was now entering the anomaly and a great jolt shook the ship, Elmina flew from her chair to the ground and the cable connecting her the computer was ripped from her. Without the sensors from the ship she had only a limited range to see with her own sensors. She had no idea what was happening around her or the ship. Every time she tried to move she was shoved back down again by a force.
* * *
The Holly Bird entered the centre of the anomaly and began to fluctuate. The ship kept rocking back and forth as something happened, something that no one could see or begin to comprehend; And then nothing. Just void around the ship. Not even the lights from the Holly Bird made any difference. It was pure nothingness. It stayed this way for what could have been years or just a second, there was no way to tell but suddenly the ship materialised somewhere, somewhere different and it was falling….fast.